Descriptive Writing

WALT: describe

Remember to:

Use your senses

• What can you see?
• What can you hear?
• What can you smell?
• What do you feel?

Show, don't tell the reader so they can see the picture in their head.

I was standing outside a broken down temple, I could hear a stone falling to the ground and I then heard a CRUNCH! I felt a whoosh of wind and it bristled my hair. I looked to the left and saw some crushed bones hidden behind the rocks and all of a sudden a skull fell to the ground. Wait a sec, there was an small, ancient gold carpet snake coming out the mouth of the skull. Awesome. I looked at the door and all I saw was a darkness like I had never seen before. Big branches were covering the door and it felt like something creepy was in there. I thought I saw a giant shadow move in the doorway then I felt the ground rumble. I could smell monkeys, they stunk. Suddenly, I felt loads of tiny legs climb up my legs and I knew it was a tarantula. I flicked it off, it felt quite soft.  A giant chimpanzee hand grabbed me and it felt like I was in a machine which was squishing me. It felt horrible and smelt like pee!  As soon as the hand let go I knew it was time to sprint through the door and start the ghost hunting.

By Luka